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    The beautiful daughter of Slardar, Slithice has always been rebellious. While her father would watch over the treasures within the deeps, she would swim freely in the ocean trying to make new discoveries. One day she found a castaway holding to a wooden crate, and quickly placed him on a small island. That night, Sanderal awoke to find himself near a campfire and some grilled fish. He noticed a feminine shape watching him from the water, but it quickly disappeared when he tried to get closer. More supplies awaited for him in the morning, and without darkness shrouding her figure, the sight of Slithice was enough for him to fall in love. Such was her beauty that his mind wasn't changed after finding out she had a fish tail hidden under the water. After that fateful day they became close lovers. Sanderal told her that he was a master of illusions and charms, and thaught her his tricks; the two lovers became inseparable. One tragic day, Slthice woke up to a scream and hurried outside the tent to see her father beheading Sanderal. In a rage, Slithice attacked her father, but she was easily over-powered, and in the last moment managed to hypnotize him and fled. Led by anger, she swam long distances, improving her fighting skills, the usage of the net and her lover's spells. After months of training, Slithice begins her quest of vengeance.


    Dota_Slithice___Naga_Siren_by_yiyang1989.jpg

    picture from http://yiyang1989.deviantart.com/art...iren-119738674
    Last edited by xXQuatchiXx; 03-26-2012, 04:31 PM.

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    but Slarder.....do you mean Slardar the Silthereen Guard right?
    It pretty good, really. You can make 2 heroes that originally doesn't really have any connection in Dota1 into 1 good relation (by story of course). The only 1 thing that left out is her net skill. Sanderal might teach that to her too right?.
    If they really are father and daughter, maybe in future we can heard "daughter, I'm dissapoint"
    Last edited by shengar; 02-07-2012, 01:30 AM.

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    • #3
      There I made some changes that should help out

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      • #4
        I really like this, and I would love to see this in DOTA 2 !
        By the way, you forgot on her Riptide spell?

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        • #5
          Originally posted by Adilmaru View Post
          I really like this, and I would love to see this in DOTA 2 !
          By the way, you forgot on her Riptide spell?
          She's a creature of the deep I think that all you need to know for riptide

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          • #6
            The story is good but a bit too long, condense it a bit.Also, I think you should keep the relation between slardar and slitihice positive and not negative. For whatever reason, I always felt slithice was evil and not a hero on a quest for vengeance.

            Alternate story for ideas to take from:

            She is an evil mermaid and tricks seamen with her beauty and song and then eats them. But one day she tries to do the same to a magician, who sees through her trick and puts a curse on her. Her face becomes hideous and only her sweet voice remains from what she once was.

            The magician who curses her could be one of the heroes in dota right now, and she can have rival lines for that hero. Dont know who that could be, though. Invoker maybe?

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            • #7
              She is part of sent and a part of radiant being evil will not help out her story they can't put her on dire unless they put her on scourge in DotA 1

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              • #8
                If refer to Dota1 lore, yes, she is part of the Sentinel. Not only mention that in Dota1 lore she had an Orc as lover! Thus, it should not questionable if Slitiche goes to Radiant side.

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                • #9
                  Story is a bit too long,and it looks like sanderal's lore,not sliths,except for the last few sentences

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                  • #10
                    Added concept art

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                    • #11
                      By the concept art are you hoping she becomes a Mermaid? There is a difference between Mermaids and Naga

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                      • #12
                        Originally posted by 4evra View Post
                        Story is a bit too long,and it looks like sanderal's lore,not sliths,except for the last few sentences
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                        story is a bit too long LOLOL i think UR A BIT LAZY !!!!


                        nice story man !!
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                        • #13
                          Originally posted by Esfe89 View Post
                          By the concept art are you hoping she becomes a Mermaid? There is a difference between Mermaids and Naga
                          Nagas are no longer in the game, they are slithreens or, the deep ones. So who says she can't be a mermaid now?

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                          • #14
                            I think the Lore is great and the length is not a problem since Omniknight's Lore is very long as well.
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                            • #15
                              Originally posted by xXQuatchiXx View Post
                              ... or even hypnotize her into a deep sleep.
                              I see what you did there...

                              On-topic: Too long, no need to describe all the skill's exact effect, just cite them.

                              Here, I tried to change it a bit:

                              The beautiful daughter of Slardar, Slithice has always been rebellious. While her father would watch over the treasures within the deeps, she would swim freely in the ocean trying to make new discoveries. One day she found a castaway holding to a wooden crate, and quickly placed him on a small island. That night, Sanderal awoke to find himself near a campfire and some grilled fish. He noticed a feminine shape watching him from the water, but it quickly disappeared when he tried to get closer. More supplies awaited for him in the morning, and without darkness shrouding her figure, the sight of Slithice was enough for him to fall in love. Such was his beauty that his mind wasn't changed after finding out she had a fish tail hidden under the water. After that fateful day they became close lovers. Sanderal told her that he was a master of illusions and charms, and thaught her his tricks; the two lovers became inseparable. One tragic day, Slthice woke up to a scream and hurried outside the tent to see her father beheading Sanderal. In a rage, Slithice attacked her father, but she was easily over-powered, and in the last moment managed to hypnotize him and fled. Led by anger, she swam long distances, improving her fighting skills, the usage of the net and her lover's spells. After months of training, Slithice begins her quest of vengeance.
                              Last edited by 0verp0wer_BR; 02-28-2012, 06:05 AM.

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